Date: 18 Jan 2007 3:14 am Title: Chapter 17
Beautifully written. It is a wonderful story that leaves a canker of sadness in the reader's heart. The grief of Alex and David is wonderfully captured in a way that makes the reader feel for them. The only negative thing I can think of is that the way David talks from Chapter 3 on is different from the way he talks in the movie and in Chapter 1, however, that may have been a choice you made as an author, because the elegant language used in the story complimented its air of sadness and longing. Good job.